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Post by ziddia on May 18, 2011 14:31:47 GMT -5
Ah, I just didn't recognize the term. Deeper vocabulary, I should remember that. Okay, I can do that.
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Post by Jair on May 18, 2011 14:36:08 GMT -5
then i can act like a equestria daily editor. I tend to be soft in my reviews but I would smash on something (note my best fan-fics to never read thing. that is like 1/4 of my full ruthlessness) if i could. Not to be mean
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Post by ziddia on May 18, 2011 14:49:52 GMT -5
Gimme a while to make this have a 'deeper vocabulary' and then would you mind reviewing it like you would if you were one of the ED judges, and PM me your thoughts?
Don't do it until I say so though.
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Post by ziddia on May 18, 2011 19:26:40 GMT -5
Updatedish. Try proofreading it Jair and give me your worst.
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Post by Jair on May 19, 2011 5:09:39 GMT -5
okay. *opens openoffice.org text document* *closes realising there are too many grammar errors.* Writing style improved. needs another CAREFUL proofread I couldn't get through three sentences without a grammar error.
but of course i do not work for ED for a reason. I'm not insane and let bad ones pass by and good ones to be stopped. I am not a big fan of ED.there is nothing wrong with it to the point of yelling at you about but improve the overall grammar. And i was really looking forward to unleashing my inner editor and pound holes in your dreams too...
I MEAN I LOVE EQUESTRIA DAILY AND I CERTAINLY CANT BE AS GOOD AS THEM...
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Post by ziddia on May 19, 2011 14:23:57 GMT -5
Thanks! I have had my dream of ED relighted... (is that a word? )
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Post by Jair on May 23, 2011 12:57:45 GMT -5
and... (do i need to ask?) how did it go?
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Post by ziddia on May 23, 2011 13:17:25 GMT -5
I need to fill in plot holes and add some more chapters, to make it longer and more readable because lots of things apparently don't make sense yet.
And he said it would help if I got a following on Ponychan.
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Post by Jair on May 23, 2011 13:53:57 GMT -5
good luck! Wanna know the inspiration for my fic and how i made 7 chapters (7 in a couple of minutes) so fast? First: go to the store and think crazy stuff. Second: Write a chapter IMMEDIATELY. Third: Grab a broomstick and swing it as you wander around your yard thinking (works for me!) Fourth: after 5 chapters go to a city for a day and think more crazy stuff. Fifth: plan out a epilogue and start writing! (works for me!)
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Post by benman54321 on May 28, 2011 2:48:36 GMT -5
Wow! Awesome storyline! ED could be within your grasp...
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